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lost

by Katie

Member since 2002 · Posted 12 Sep 2002 · Edited 20 Dec 2002 · 10 comments

Fights and arguments, Yelling, and cussing, Confusion, and sadness, Love and happiness. Through all the pain and suffering, Through all the good times, Through our laughter, Through are pain. Were not the same, We've changed. From better to worse, To a loss of words. I'm not sure what to say around you, Not sure how to act around you. Should I walk by and scream hi, Or should I just ignore the fact that your alive? My other half I feel is gone, I feel so lost, and all alone, Without you by my side, I just want to run away and cry, where no one can hear me, or see me, alone and oh so weak.

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10 comments

[n/a] Limness 12-Sep-02/8:18 AM Reply
Why would someone your age let another be your everything? Look in the mirror, and smile. Put it out there; There'll be lots more takers baby.
[n/a] Christof › Limness 12-Sep-02/8:23 AM Reply
Very wise advice Limness. Katie has years and years to get shackled to somebody - enjoy yourself while you can!
[n/a] god'swife › Christof 12-Sep-02/9:41 AM Reply
Enjoy yourself while you can?!?! Jesus christ Christof! I picture you falling into the abyss as you wail out your last word of advice. The poem is self-indulgent. Katie, are you taking creative writing?
[5] renwick 15-Sep-02/10:09 PM Reply
The begining sounds like a list but I like that there is emotion in it. I give it a 5.
[10] loneshadow29 17-Sep-02/8:42 AM Reply
I understand the pain you have gone through in this poem hon... but rest assured, the one whom you seek, you shall find and happiness eternal, you shall roam free :o) Great Poem!!
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › loneshadow29 21-Dec-02/10:31 AM Reply
er yeah but you just made that up just now, didn't you? The fact that someone could read your comment and then somehow feel comforted by it is totally amazing. But then again, we are talking about Katie here...
[5] wOrnella Mutiw 21-Dec-02/1:37 AM Reply
"Through are pain"...change that. For your age it's not bad, but try to experiment with different subject matters. There's more to life than guys....like smurfs.
[n/a] scitz 21-Dec-02/5:15 AM Reply
innocent, sweet, you are obviously a seed of a writer but its quite refreshing to see work from the heart warts and all
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › scitz 21-Dec-02/10:37 AM Reply
'work from the heart' is the least 'refreshing' kind work you could ever find. It is, in fact, the most generic kind of work you could ever find. You, Sir, are a Cadlington of the First Class.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 21-Dec-02/10:32 AM Reply
change the last word to 'beak'