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Prayer

Member since 2005 · Posted 15 Sep 2006 · Edited 7 Dec 2006 · 16 comments

I wait on the Lord, morning and night would I call on Him, I search,I seek answers to my questionsâ¦ And then like the rush of the stormy winds He quenches, fills the void of empty soul: torrents of love and grace. He spoke in the stillness of my heart.

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[10] ALChemy 15-Sep-06/7:34 PM Reply

Beautiful

[n/a] amanda_dcosta › ALChemy 15-Sep-06/7:37 PM Reply

Geeee!!! Thanks.

[8] half.italian 15-Sep-06/10:29 PM Reply

I dont particularly like God poems. But this one is good. It reads better if you get rid of "would I call on him" and "quenching" and "torrents of love and grace" IMHO

[n/a] amanda_dcosta › half.italian 17-Sep-06/8:41 AM Reply

Thank you, half.italian.

Quenching and torrents of love and grace have been there on purpose. Quenching is to indicate that my soul was thirsting for His presence and I was filled..., and torrents of love and grace are to indicate that I was filled with his presence of love and grace... as simple as that.

[7] Dovina 16-Sep-06/10:56 AM Reply

I waited on the Lord,
called on Him morning and night.

Then, like the rush of stormy wind,
He spoke with void-filling torrent,
breaking the stillness of my heart.

Sorry

[n/a] amanda_dcosta › Dovina 17-Sep-06/8:49 AM Reply

D. I see here that you have changed the entire context of the subject. I didn't just wait on Him... I searched for him, I sought. Impact.
And again.. He quenched my questions of insecurities, doubts, fears, what ever I had been asking of him through His infilling of grace and love.

As you state in your last line... breaking the stillness of my heart, He did not break the stillness of my heart... He merely honored me with His presence when I waited on Him in silence and patience and meekness. He made my spirit stand in awe of Him.

[n/a] ecargo › Dovina 18-Sep-06/9:16 AM Reply

Much more interesting and lyrical, especially the last line. Nice rewrite.

[5] nypoet22 17-Sep-06/3:43 AM Reply

what did He say? what did He say? as the introduction to a series i could see this poem working, but i don't think it stands on its own.

[n/a] amanda_dcosta › nypoet22 17-Sep-06/8:51 AM Reply

He said all I needed to know by just His presence of love.

[1] Edna Sweetlove 17-Sep-06/6:24 PM Reply

Hilarious. I laughed till I urinated.

[n/a] amanda_dcosta › Edna Sweetlove 17-Sep-06/9:22 PM Reply

I'm glad there was some effect.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Edna Sweetlove 19-Jul-07/3:47 AM Reply

Do not mock worship, you boor.

[3] colbaby 20-Sep-06/7:29 AM Reply

Dear Sweet Edna, "Hilarious. I laughed till I urinated." Does that mean you pissed yourself laughing at the poem or you laughed at the poem till you had to go take a piss? Big difference. Not entirely sure what you mean. Bullshit. I know exactly what you mean. You're being a funny bastard. Aren't you?

[8] Ranger 21-Sep-06/12:31 AM Reply

Hey Amanda, sorry I've not yet replied to your email. I will though, bear with me!

This seems very much like a short psalm; lyrical and dramatic. I'd split line 2 into two (finish on 'night'), and finish line 3 on something other than '-ing' (give it a word with a strong ending). Still nice, needs music methinks :-)

[8] Ranger 8-Dec-06/5:14 AM Reply

I'm tempted to suggest adding rhymes to this - it needs to move a little more easily.

[9] deleted user 8-Dec-06/5:51 AM Reply

This is a nice post Amanda. What appeals to me most is the way you break your lines--something I have trouble with--keep up the good work.