poemranker ::Disposal and Liberation by MacFrantic

DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Free verse № 148116

Disposal and Liberation

Member since 2003 · Posted 23 Nov 2006 · 1 comment

I jumped from the top of the Empire State Building The month was August The sun was setting How cliché A bit more than a quarter mile And as I fell The wind pulled dreams from my head. Memories exploded upwards from my chest As my words faded with them I stood at the top of the Empire State Building The month was August The sun was rising How cliché A bit more than a quarter mile Looking down I saw my twisted and empty body Little changed of me as I occupied myself And nothing else

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 4.00 weighted 4.95 rank 8760 views 122 View voting details →

2 votes so far. Yours would make 3.2 votes so far

1 comment

[8] Dovina 24-Nov-06/9:39 AM Reply
I've been there and had a similar thought. It's not badly stated.