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Free verse № 148336

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Member since 2003 · Posted 10 Dec 2006 · 8 comments

There is nothing so sweet as the bitter ode from a woman's tongue. She is the razor blade viper; an unearthly diversion. The meek bask in her unrelenting wrath. Her wares are the grotesque corruptions of long-forgotten gains. What the heart provides, she will nourish, and both will flourish. Yet, in the moment of abandon, that overseer will stumble and drive a knife into the chest. So what is the ruse? It's masked in rouge, and smells of perfumed corpses; a testament to the bygones. Because where the devil sleeps she sits upright, staring into the blackness of everlasting night.

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8 comments

[9] Dovina 10-Dec-06/4:58 PM Reply
Wow, you write a lot of poems! Are you trying to surpass me in poems posted? Lots of luck there, fella. My fear, however, is that you could be younger, and could win fifty years from now.

All right, here’s the bitter ode from a woman’s tongue: You comment too little! Your comments are fewer than comments received, and this is not only bad etiquette, it’s contrary to the ode “It is more blessed to give than to receive.” So, get into the process – dialog, debate, comment. You’ll become a better poet.

As for this poem, it’s pretty good. One of you better posts.
[n/a] MacFrantic › Dovina 10-Dec-06/6:19 PM Reply
I'm really just using this site to archive. I read many of the poems, but I don't comment much any more, and I don't care too much if people comment on mine. I'm becoming a better poet through experiencing life, rather than spending all my time on the computer. Be well, and I thank you for the comment.
[n/a] MacFrantic › Dovina 10-Dec-06/6:21 PM Reply
By the way, I have 316 poems on this site...and counting.
[9] Dovina › MacFrantic 10-Dec-06/8:20 PM Reply
MacFrantic has 188. Care to say who else you are?
[n/a] MacFrantic › Dovina 10-Dec-06/11:30 PM Reply
Enkidu (65)
D. $ Fontera (63)
Deimos (2)
[n/a] MacFrantic › MacFrantic 10-Dec-06/11:30 PM Reply
So...318
[9] Dovina › MacFrantic 13-Dec-06/9:38 PM Reply
ok, you're ahead, but I could have done that!
[10] leonxic 14-Dec-06/12:50 PM Reply
I sense some contempt. Fantastic writing. 10.