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the lips of your mouth

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 May 2002 · 5 comments

the lips of your mouth are of a colour which cannot be found in the flowers or the skies it cannot be seen in stones bird feathers beetle wings the eyes of fishes it does not appear in any of the art that litters the world your lips - my wish is that you might lift them to me one day

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[5] anonymous 14-May-02/9:32 AM Reply

first of all, "The lips of your mouth" is a tad redundant, don't you think? I see what you're going for and it's nice... but it just doesn't work. And s3 - if you're trying to elevate and show some sort of awe for the color of her lips, then don't compare it with art that LITTERS the world, for fuck's sake. Compare it to something lovelier than bird feathers, etc....

[6] Tintagiles › anonymous 7-Sep-05/8:18 PM Reply

Presuming that this is addressed to a lady, there are a couple of other sets of lips he could be writing about...

[8] Sigh'ense... 30-Jul-02/8:04 PM Reply

oooohhhhh

[7] god 24-Aug-02/3:17 AM Reply

Ok-7/10

[6] Tintagiles 18-Mar-05/6:51 PM Reply

Why the 'eyes of fishes', which are rather boring, as opposed to their scales, which can be quite rainbow-like?

And if you're adoring someone, isn't requesting them to lift their lips a bit ungallant -- even if they're shorter, they're supposed to be on a pedestal...