I heart you

Member since 2007 · Posted 16 Jan 2007 · 3 comments

There are words on the fridge, Theyâre magnetic. âI liver you, with all my lungs.â âJanuary breaks 50% offâ¦ââ There are pictures of cats, newspaper cuttings with words and letters blacked out. âI stomach you, I do, but I donât brain you. Lets skin. And glove your holesâ. âSweet, sharp, sophisticated and fullâ¦â No melon, no lemon, the fridge door has lost its suction, the light stays on. (Pictured above, dancing). There is inside, next to the peppered cheese, a gaudy matrioshka. (Despot daughter a mini-dictator). There is on her face a black moustache; it might as easily be snot, or a spot.

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[6] Dovina 16-Jan-07/11:26 AM Reply

Would be better withoiut the "There"'s. i.e., "Magnetic words on the fridge"

[8] Shuushin 17-Jan-07/6:20 AM Reply

not the usual fare, I like it overall. it either needs to be about a third shorter, or twice as long - you pick.

[8] ecargo 17-Jan-07/12:32 PM Reply

Pretty good, original. I like your nouns acting as verbs--they work in a weird and very cool way; it's what gives this a unique twist I think. Overall, focused, sharp, though the parenthetical bits distract, detract from the whole, I think.