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Game Over (Free verse) by nentwined If you do everything correctly
everything just so
you will die.
Context determines when
a twist of the pliers
is torture, metaphor
or hyperbole.
Blood in your mouth
a reminder of
life and death
A piece of you torn away
and stitched together.
Same as every moment
any moment
constantly reborn.
Up the ladder:
(untitled)
Down the ladder:
Yet more woe
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Posted: February 22, 2021 9:20 AM PST; Last modified: February 22, 2021 9:20 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.357609 Overall Rank: 3379 Comments:
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Dovina @ 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1
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11-Mar-21/12:21 PM
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Dismal take on life. Everything ends in death. btw, a twist of the pliers fixed me faucet, and a piece of me torn away saved my life. I too have looked at it both ways.
last stanza not necessary, trying to be too broad. stick with the image and stop where it stops.
I say take out the first stanza.
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