Free verse № 149974
Captured
Thick fingers grasp a shovel,
clutch a swinging pick,
heft a rock-filled wheelbarrowâ
hands so big, when one is
cupped upon my nose,
thumb and pinkie
touch each earâ
on its backside, coarse dark hairs,
roughened hide withinâ
antithesis of mine.
Within a softer crevice
behind a gnarly knuckle,
calloused hills on either side
fold around a tender fingerâ
a little fear, a little power,
as the lion gently smiles.
Other fingers join to hold
a long and polished nail,
a tiny member, trapped as prey,
held huskily in fluted flesh,
squeezed in muscular quiver,
to comfort, crush, caress,
according to his wish.
My finger-weapon
like a trainerâs chair,
but better to enticeâ
a large and sturdy paw,
protects a weaker vessel,
can handle softer life.
32 comments
Well executed. Blessed with nine.
Good Good Good !!! Bethy:)
I feel a little dirty, as if I should have changed my pantaloons after watchin' the big, strong stableboy shovel out the stall ('cause surely some shit was being slung). The focus on the hand is pretty good, but the rest borders on pre-sexual-emancipation bad-romance-novel cliche.
General impression--not interested, really. A curious idea, but I'm not buying. More context, maybe?
After that, yeah, I was all over the place with the poem--couldn't focus. Maybe work the earlier bits in, throughout, and be a little less circumspect?
I really don't know.
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