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Makin' Bacon

Member since 2007 · Posted 10 Apr 2007 · 10 comments

It's early, yes i know But it's Sunday and it snowed What to eat, let me see Makin' bacon, I agree. Sausages or cereal, they're all good But today it's bacon, we all should The smell, the sizzle, I'm ready to eat Makin' bacon sure is neat.

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[n/a] NICKDRP 10-Apr-07/6:19 PM Reply

Its a great Canadian Sunday morning!

[3] bwaha 13-Apr-07/12:58 PM Reply

The first verse has very good rhythm. The worlds flow naturally, and I really like it. Only thing I would say to maybe change is "it snowed" to "there's snow" because then your rhyme is more perfect.

The second verse looses the flow of the first, though. One thing to keep in mind when writing rhyming poems is to count syllables. Frequently (though not always) the closer the syllable counts in your lines are, the better the poem will flow.

Also, this poem is obviously meant to be light hearted and fun, but even still...neat? Reading the first verse, I would assume I was dealing with a playful adult. But the second verse makes me feel like I am talking to a creative, yet unskilled grade schooler.

The idea is cute though.

[5] EAger to Offend 18-Apr-07/9:58 PM Reply

I think that "neat" is the perfect word to end this on. Not only is it a juvenile complement to the whimsy of this piece, the conotation is just as Leave-it-to-Beaver, 50's-ish as a the very bacon breakfast of which you speak.

[n/a] NICKDRP › EAger to Offend 19-Apr-07/3:36 PM Reply

Thank you EAger...cheers

[8] half.italian 19-Apr-07/7:16 PM Reply

Kinda reminds me of a Dr. Suess.

[10] susanthered 21-Nov-15/12:57 PM Reply

this poem is amazing!!!
I love it...well done!!!!

[10] susanthered 21-Nov-15/12:58 PM Reply

I bet the guy who wrote this is an amazing person and really great looking....what a hottie!

[n/a] NICKDRP 18-Mar-20/12:38 PM Reply

Wonderful poem !!!!

[n/a] NICKDRP 18-Mar-20/12:45 PM Reply

Its been years..and i know
making bacon can be slow
all you comments
all your slurs
means nothing..as we know
snow and sleet
sunday morn
family love to talk and eat
its all about the sizzle
and not the meat
when will you all learn
stop analyzing the repeat
off we go, making the bun
tomato and cheese
its all about fun

good bye for good..love you all :)

[n/a] NICKDRP 18-Mar-20/12:45 PM Reply