poemranker ::Before Dawn by Christof

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Free verse № 154575

Before Dawn

Member since 2002 · Posted 27 Nov 2007 · 2 comments

The sky doesn't know what it is yet, An irresolute wash scribbled over by Night things, something that scratches, An insect or bird, an itching of sound In the dense smudge of inkblots That by morning are trees. The starlit effusion is wiped off the canvas And the sky shakes awaiting the klaxon of sun Like the teenage boy in his roiling bedsheets Who doesn't quite know what day it is yet.

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[10] INTRANSIT 27-Nov-07/9:33 AM Reply
Klaxon. Great word. Could you say- boy or girl in roiling- ? Or is this a specific person. You?
[9] Dark Angle 1-Dec-07/10:30 PM Reply
I'm sure there are more accurate adjectives for a teenage boy's bedsheets, but 9 for you.