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Mommy, why does -=DarkAngel=- use 'an' so much? (Limerick) by <{Baba^Yaga}>
There once was an angel who fell. In love with an cow's swinging bell. He played it all day and wore a toupe'. He named his beef sweet Jezabel. He was darker than most but no cad. With neither an mom nor an dad. He sold them to God for an yard full of sod. The back of his shirt says "i 'm so rad!". Then the dark one met his match. An three legged prawn with an hatch. The prawn swung its leg and made the naive beg. For an full service job 'pon his snatch. The next day the angel was sore. And lying face down on an floor. The prawn had switched shell and stolen his bell. Now his beef packing days were no more. {now that's about as anti-superman-'deep'-haircut as you can get. Yet.}

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 6.9950547
Overall Rank: 95
Posted: September 18, 2002 7:39 PM PDT; Last modified: September 18, 2002 7:39 PM PDT
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[7] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 23-Sep-02/4:20 AM | Reply
I'm sure Dark Angel is delighted with this. But you didn't put 'e' on the end of prawn.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > Christof | 23-Sep-02/1:14 PM | Reply
it would of added to many beats to that stanza, plus i feel that i've ripped him off enough..i didn't want to go 'overboard' i mean after all we are talking about a spineless shrimp like critter how much more can you add to that...besides a nettable income.a
[6] Service @ 211.28.96.37 | 8-Oct-02/10:10 PM | Reply
That gave me a chuckle.
[7] lunar @ 195.92.194.13 | 9-Dec-02/1:57 PM | Reply
yes the angel is not so dark now hehe
[7] Robert K Foster @ 209.68.98.120 | 15-Jan-03/9:36 AM | Reply
I suppose its all in good fun. I was a smidge distracted by the lack of line break separating the rhymes in the 3rd line of each limerick.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > Robert K Foster | 15-Jan-03/2:03 PM | Reply
GOD! you are so hyper critical. Do you think you could take your bow tie off, and kick your feet up for a moment, and just relax?
Have a beer for lunch now and then. We are poets not conservative arithmetic teachers.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.97 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 15-Jan-03/2:42 PM | Reply
An Gentleman shall not remove his Bowe Tie!
You'll get a kick out of this.
http://knowingpoe.thinkport.org/default_flash.asp

they should call it 'knowing toe" the life and times
of poe jam. lol.
[n/a] JakeBike @ 67.84.171.238 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 15-Jan-03/3:57 PM | Reply
psssssst! (he's a teacher)
[8] hipster flare @ 66.24.73.199 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 16-Jan-03/6:00 AM | Reply
I think you are being oversensitive about it. pointing out a distraction is a lot different from slamming you.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > hipster flare | 16-Jan-03/11:19 AM | Reply
Please...allow me to clarify. I am not being oversensitive. I am well aware of the distraction you are pointing at. Having put it there as a distraction to begin with. I just thought it would be interesting to see how it appeared and sounded. Your observations do not have me in a state of denial, regret, or sensitivity. Thank you for commenting. I can tell the difference between slamming and mature criticism. Thanks again.
I happen to take your view points into perspective quite regularly, and value your opinion as a poet and a peer. I enjoy your work very much.

Yours truly,

<{Baba^Yaga}> 'Queen of the Huts'
[6] ==Doylum @ 62.64.205.29 | 12-Feb-03/4:20 AM | Reply
ribit, ribit
[1] Edna Sweetlove @ 81.178.117.218 | 15-May-06/5:00 PM | Reply
Illiterate. Not limericks. Pathetic.
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