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Haiku № 1656

Spring Haiku

by Staika

Member since 2002 · Posted 12 May 2002 · 5 comments

You tear at my eyes like a heron spearing fish in the cold spring dusk

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5 comments

[1] anonymous 14-May-02/3:04 PM Reply
this is great. - aduren
[4] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 22-May-02/5:26 AM Reply
Nice one! I love the use of the words "spring" and "dusk". I've never seen those in a poem before!
[7] Jill Stockinger 14-Jul-02/2:43 PM Reply
Tear and spear don't work as
being analagous enough, for me.
Jill S. I LOVE "like a heron spearing fish in the cold spring dusk."
[8] Robert K Foster 17-Sep-02/7:30 AM Reply
effective simile. good show.
[7] halofriendly 21-Apr-04/5:59 PM Reply
VERY good imagery