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Deaf

by sav876

Member since 2002 · Posted 26 Sep 2002 · 31 comments

Riding down the street, riding down the road, looking for a story to be told. Nothing to my right, nothing to my left, one day i wish to be more than deaf. Going through life without hearing a sound, I wonder if it's even worhth listening around. I wish this diease would just go away, but life goes on day after day. My life is a struggle just trying to maintain, wondering if tomorrow would bring a new pain. One day I'll realize I'm not deaf at all, I just hear what i want to hear, and not listen at all

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31 comments

[9] INTRANSIT 26-Sep-02/1:24 PM Reply
Hope you're not really deaf. Last line hit full throttle.Liked it!9
[n/a] sav876 › INTRANSIT 26-Sep-02/2:30 PM Reply
thanks alot
[3] god'swife 27-Sep-02/9:17 AM Reply
I came, I read, I voted. Contradictory. !st you're wishing to be deaf then you're wishing to be "this disease would just go away". Very weak. Seems like you wrote this on the run.
[n/a] ==Doylum › god'swife 27-Sep-02/9:23 AM Reply
no. sav wants to be more than deaf, not to be deaf.
[3] god'swife › ==Doylum 27-Sep-02/9:31 AM Reply
I'm menstruating, so i can't read or write. I think the disease or friend wants to be rid of is life itself. o.k., but it's still most bad.
[n/a] poetandknowit › god'swife 27-Sep-02/9:33 AM Reply
Why is it, you always tell me more than I want to know! Anyway, check is in the preverbial mail.
[3] god'swife › poetandknowit 27-Sep-02/9:38 AM Reply
It's my job. You being a father of daughters and all, I like giving you insight on the ways of women. Brutal but useful. I missed Doly too.
[n/a] poetandknowit › god'swife 27-Sep-02/9:42 AM Reply
I am in denial about having daughters. Especially when it comes to sucking and not fucking.
[3] god'swife › poetandknowit 27-Sep-02/9:47 AM Reply
Yuo suck & fuck other men's daughters don't you? Plus you wouldn't deny your daughters the pleasure and therapeutic benefits. Better then SRI's for curing depression, less costly, and no side effects. (except of course STD's and pregnancy) Does your oldest know how to put on a condom?
[n/a] poetandknowit › god'swife 27-Sep-02/10:00 AM Reply
Excuse me, I am quite comfortable with my double standards! My 8 year old is pleasantly stuck in the latency period, but she knows what Ken and Barbie can do when the lights go down, if that is what you are asking. She is a suburban girl and that frightens me more than her fucking some 13 year old. It is ideology development in a homogenous world. And it is SSRIs and they are the greatest invention since penicillin. Inhibit the reuptake!!! Give the neurotransmitters something to do!!
[3] god'swife › poetandknowit 27-Sep-02/10:07 AM Reply
prick up your ears. SSRI's are headed for the waste bin. They cause severe withdrawal symptoms including schizophrenia & suicide. Self-medication with orgasm and semen is a far more gentle and wholesome approach. Did you know semen contains natural SSRI's and stimulates dopamine receptors?
[n/a] ==Doylum › god'swife 27-Sep-02/10:15 AM Reply
Maybe encourage some self love, although given the genes it hardly seems nessacery, but that can have side effects as well leading to RSI's.
[n/a] poetandknowit › ==Doylum 27-Sep-02/10:24 AM Reply
Self love can be a defense mechanism to inhibit vulnerabilities from rearing there ugly head.
[n/a] poetandknowit › god'swife 27-Sep-02/10:20 AM Reply
I don't think they are. I think they are evolving as we understand exactly what function is what. Is it serotonin? Is it monoamines? Is it norepinephirine? Whatever. The rift between Freud and Kraepelin must narrow if we are to continue to move forward. But I have my theories on this and I could share them with you at another time. This forum may not be the place.
[n/a] ==Doylum › god'swife 27-Sep-02/9:50 AM Reply
Bollocks you didn't miss me, you hardly even acknowledge me, i've never had any condescending comments, or beautiful insights into my state of education or character from you. I feel quite bereft.
[n/a] poetandknowit › ==Doylum 27-Sep-02/9:54 AM Reply
Oh how I missed the sweet shape of ironic flow. If only you were a woman!!!
[n/a] ==Doylum › poetandknowit 27-Sep-02/10:00 AM Reply
Yeah well im not. OK.
[n/a] poetandknowit › ==Doylum 27-Sep-02/10:02 AM Reply
But if you were!!
[n/a] ==Doylum › poetandknowit 27-Sep-02/10:07 AM Reply
What?
[3] god'swife › ==Doylum 27-Sep-02/9:55 AM Reply
But I did! Perhaps i'm impossibly shy, or maybe that's an excuse, forgive for acting aloof. It's just that I was so overwhelmed by your span. Like standing in a cathedral, a sat in the back pew, but I always admired you. I love reading your comments intelligent and adorable as only the Isle of Man can produce.
[n/a] ==Doylum › god'swife 27-Sep-02/10:06 AM Reply
So now i'm Manx am I? Why do manky people produce such "intelligent" comments? is it cause they speak a tongue not dissimilar to that of the little people? Enlighten me please
[n/a] poetandknowit › ==Doylum 27-Sep-02/10:09 AM Reply
He is a direct descendent of the druids. His great great great grandpop built Stonehenge single handed. The ultimate crop circle. Seen by the busloads.
[n/a] ==Doylum › poetandknowit 27-Sep-02/10:28 AM Reply
Again bollocks. He built Long meg and her daughters, and had a hand in the middle of the three henges at Thornborough. Stonehange was rebuilt so much more recently and is piddleing in comparison. He also sacrificed the Piltdown man.
[n/a] poetandknowit › ==Doylum 27-Sep-02/10:33 AM Reply
Holy crap!! That explains it. Doylum, Doyle!! You are young Sherlock Holmes!
[n/a] ==Doylum › poetandknowit 27-Sep-02/10:46 AM Reply
No we already covered that, it is not I who can claim that most honerable name is it now?
[3] god'swife › ==Doylum 27-Sep-02/10:12 AM Reply
Adorable I think. Intelligence is more an individual matter. I just used the Isle a geographical reference point. It being equi-distant to Scotland, Ireland & Wales. It's my own mythology I know nothing of it's reality. Perhaps you could enlighten me?
[n/a] ==Doylum › god'swife 27-Sep-02/10:19 AM Reply
No!
[n/a] poetandknowit › ==Doylum 27-Sep-02/10:26 AM Reply
I am not like loneshadow. I keep my personal reference points nice and tidy in metaphor.
[n/a] poetandknowit 27-Sep-02/9:32 AM Reply
The winged dolie returns from a two week bender. Not the Lost Weekend, the Lost Week. Hurrah! I for one missed you!
[n/a] ==Doylum › poetandknowit 27-Sep-02/9:46 AM Reply
You missed me dearest mark? Oh how loved i feel
[4] nentwined 17-Dec-02/11:24 AM Reply
a try. I like the sentiment of the last line and how it puts some twist on the rest, but... the rhymes feel canned, the rhythm flat...