Up The Road Aways

Member since 2002 · Posted 26 Sep 2002 · 2 comments

Walking the hollow, simple world I balk at the thought of a cereal breakfast In a cardboard box of time I sit slinging slugs of muck to the wind and thinking about something I forgot long ago Before things mangled themselves And time stood still. But trudge on we must Thru the gloomy night Into the too bright dawn

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[8] INTRANSIT 27-Sep-02/4:28 AM Reply

I yearn for simpler times too. Thanks for reminding me where my watch is.

[4] Tarquin De La Bog 2-Oct-02/1:42 PM Reply

And your point is? There's some nice wording in places; 'slinging slugs of muck to the wind' is lovely, but the ending is cliched and dull. Have a 4, as an encouragement for future efforts.