poemranker ::Carrie by ErgoErgun

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Lyric № 1753

Carrie

Member since 2002 · Posted 12 May 2002 · Edited 12 May 2002 · 4 comments

Nobility on no accounts overtook me, but now I find myself scrawling despicable poetry! - the most undignified concession of frailty... at your authority hath commanded me... Carrie... This vow by your intellect, wide-eyes, and softened hair do I dare to move, show emotion... to simply care... Don Juanism was my philosophy; the expedient my style, but your grace perverted, inverted, defiled the vile. A quiver of your delicacy, a misbegotten stare now pollutes the breadth of a soul filled with air... thoughts convoluted in a head at your command are turning my lascivious desires from boyhood to man. And while we feast on ideas I pray you feel in kind, for this is transcendence: a sex of the mind.

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4 comments

[6] nentwined 13-May-02/1:37 AM Reply
a very interesting tone and some nice self-reference.
[n/a] gsosville 31-May-02/8:13 AM Reply
pure shit
[9] shwenatjadeflower 18-Jul-02/3:30 PM Reply
i like it
[8] horus8 23-Jan-04/10:19 AM Reply
You're always good.