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Free verse № 19674

Hit & Run

Member since 2002 · Posted 9 Oct 2002 · Edited 9 Oct 2002 · 9 comments

laughing with a friend leaving the studio he still has glass of merlot sloshing we have been drinking steady all day and night is that a red light? no..it's the back of a honda! standing there we are all confused i say are you okay but he is already calling johnny. i burn rubber down a side street as my liscense plate flips over. some things are better than a d.u.i like a sore necked hangover and a week of door bell paranoia like some more hair of the dog that bit me... and maybe a new bumper.... well..maybe not. maybe louder gram parsons bigger tires and mud flaps would you have stayed? [Joshua tree will never let me be] <plus that was my last drink and chance card> a finger printed glass rolls still in the gutter... lets be a bit more careful...shall we..thanks. i'll try..

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[7] god'swife 9-Oct-02/6:44 PM Reply
Typo S5, L2.
[n/a] horus8 › god'swife 9-Oct-02/7:23 PM Reply
thanks. got it.
[n/a] w~* ATHENA *~w › horus8 9-Oct-02/10:46 PM Reply
good thing you didn't hit a cat.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 10-Oct-02/5:29 AM Reply
a ha ha ha. Cheers !!
[7] razorgrin 11-Oct-02/6:58 AM Reply
I like the "back of a honda". Sounds like quite a time.
[7] Tascobar 15-Nov-02/4:47 AM Reply
Strangely composed, but I like this one. 7. Try not to drink and drive, though. I find that spillage plays merry hell with the upholstery.
[n/a] horus8 › Tascobar 17-Nov-02/8:36 PM Reply
it's pretty incrimidating as a cop approaches you window...also...indeed. thanxs for the box of juicy fruit. perhaps i will trade it for a life, or just some cinnamon life.
[9] [mojo] 16-Nov-02/1:57 AM Reply
Nice. The back of one car does not a district make. 9.
[n/a] horus8 › [mojo] 17-Nov-02/8:33 PM Reply
brother...you aint kidding. good call.??