Deadly Rape

by HolyKnightOfFaith

Member since 2002 · Posted 18 May 2002 · Edited 20 May 2002 · 6 comments

Little boy runs quick. A Large man chases quicker, Boy found in gutter.

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6 comments

[0] anonymous 19-May-02/12:33 AM Reply

not a haiku
17 syllables, and its like a small movie, not a reflection.. not turning in itself on the image....

[5] deleted user 19-May-02/3:04 AM Reply

perhaps "faster" instead of "fast".

This lacks subtlety -- perhaps the hardness was intended to play off the haiku form, but it doesn't quite work for me.

[n/a] HolyKnightOfFaith 24-May-02/2:04 PM Reply

any suggestions?

[10] -=SeTTle=- 26-May-02/10:05 AM Reply

AWWW YEAH

[n/a] beakism 8-Jun-02/9:23 AM Reply

yeah, I like the way you've thwarted the reader's expectations by taking a traditionally subtle and suggestive form and producing a blunt, harsh image.

[0] Voth269 24-Jul-02/5:45 PM Reply

there are two people who have this poem.. or r u just two people?