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Sonnet № 21448

THE MISSING HEART

Member since 2002 · Posted 20 Oct 2002 · 10 comments

A MISSING HERAT FOLLOWS SWEAT SMELL OF ROSES THE WONDERS SETTLED DOWN IN LAST CHARMING EYES AND NIGHTMARE FELL DOWN IN THE FACE OF SMOOTH SUN THE LOUD VOICES TRON SILKY DREAMS OF SKIES THE BLANK PAPER FACES THE WORDS OF BIRDES AND MINE THE SIMPLE BEAUTY FLEW AND RESTTING ON REYS THE HURTS OF YESTERDAYS WAS LEFT BEHIND FAR BEYS RIDING THE HORSE TO EDIT EAST AND WEST SUN IN DAWN OF MY LOVE

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10 comments

[n/a] <~> 21-Oct-02/8:29 AM Reply
WE MIGHT PERCEIVE YOUR WORDS AS MORE ROMANTIC IF YOU DIDN'T SHOUT ALL THE TIME.
[1] Tintagiles 21-Oct-02/9:51 AM Reply
OUCH, I THINK I MUST BE DEAF. THIS ISN'T A SONNET, BY THE WAY. A SONNET HAS FOURTEEN LINES AND RHYMES. SORRY TO DISSAPOINT YOU. HERAT HAS INDEED BEEN MISSING FOR A LONG TIME. 'TRON'? 'RESTTING'? 'REYS'? 'BEYS'? WHAT DO ALGERIAN RULERS HAVE TO DO WITH THIS?
[1] Nicholas Monson 4-Dec-02/4:06 AM Reply
This is not a sonnet. Sonnet has a strict format. Re categorise it
[8] horus8 11-Dec-02/7:31 PM Reply
tron and birdes are fun and beys? well what can i says? they are always fabulous with portebellos and bacon.b
[4] nentwined 17-Dec-02/11:37 AM Reply
THIS HURTS.
[3] mikejedw 12-Jan-03/9:01 PM Reply
It's six lines too short to be a sonnet. What's with the capitalization?
[2] andrewjthomas 5-May-03/10:32 AM Reply
this is not a sonnet, you should look up the structure...
sonnets are strictly iambic pentameter, you can deviate a little, but not that much
you also follow a strict ryhme scheme depending on the type
english sonnet for instance is: abab cdcd efef gg
that last couplet (gg) should answer the previous stanzas somehow
[5] Bachus 14-Aug-03/9:26 PM Reply
Wickedly obtrusive.
[n/a] Sasha 9-May-04/8:39 PM Reply
Not a sonnet


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[0] mr cunt 5-Mar-07/3:16 AM Reply
I LAUGHED SO LONG AND LOUDLY THAT I PISSED MY PANTS! TOTAL POMPOUS RUBBISH! I SHALL ADD YOU TO ME "CUNTS" LIST.