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Free verse № 244

Untitled

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 10 comments

heard you talked to my mother today don't think I don't know what you're doing don't dance around in those little circles skipping around in those tiny, tiny circles you're no better at skipping than me 'cause I've been skipping all my life look at my watch and I see it's time to stop skipping and time to start running 'cause it's doing me no good I'm still in the same little circle just like you pretty soon we're gonna end up walking a hole in the ground now I climbed up to watch you and I'll watch you from my tower of books and from above you don't look so scary but you're looking pretty scared and maybe you should 'cause what if I fell off my tower you'd be the one to break my fall I'm seeing just the top of your head it doesn't look too soft

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10 comments

[n/a] deleted user 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
Last two lines make the poem. Maybe this would work orally, but my reading doesn't give it enough life.
[8] anonymous 19-Jul-01/10:05 AM Reply
YOU..... NEED....... TITLES......
[8] anonymous 24-Jul-01/12:58 PM Reply
huh?
[n/a] Jill Stockinger 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
Funny! Was it meant to be?
[8] anonymous 13-May-02/12:12 AM Reply
Crap.
[n/a] Piano 28-May-02/3:25 AM Reply
To whoever just wrote "crap", explain yourself better next time. It doesn't bother me or do either of us one bit of good for you just to write "crap."
[n/a] Piano 28-May-02/3:42 AM Reply
I'm unsure what you mean by "He's no WCW." If he means me, then I'm a she. And if WCW means wrestling, then what are you doing on a poetry site?
[n/a] razorgrin 15-Jul-02/10:41 AM Reply
Titles would be nice.This one made me smile.
[4] nentwined 11-Aug-02/7:07 PM Reply
cute. can't say as I liked it, but cute.
[3] <~> 11-Aug-02/7:25 PM Reply
WCW= william carlos williams