Insecurity, mostly. Trying to balance work,poetry and time with my wife is frustrating. I'd rather verse and learn more than anything right now. Would you comment on my haiku, please.
Actually, I quite enjoy the haiku if used properly. I think it allows you: 1) to reduce emotion, sometimes difficult emotion, into simple images and 2) create pure imagery. However, folks seem to be tied up on English variations of it and forget the images for say, a comedic purpose. That bothers me. Ypu did not do that here, so don't pull a God's Wife on me.
A god's wife? She pulled her stuff around the same time I did. That was wierd. I prefer to stay as close to the proper form and topic as I can. I'm all for anything poignant or humorous though.
ben left to go do something manly, i think. so it was just me and nat and the kids and crazy paul. ho hum. that's why i'm home early. oh, and the slammer showed up and had a bite with us too.
swing the meaning a bit. my favorite haikus have a twist implied within. e.g.--the first 2 lines make me think of a disco ball, but your title isn't duplictous enough to make the last line a relevation. see it?
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