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Free verse № 274

Sleep does my eyes

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 4 comments

sleep dep my eyes rolled (back) and slammed (back) down (to forwards...) dripping water mindfold wraps around: a ker-(chief); a ker-(osene rag)... cold (before it burns). lucid blankness of passing (time) fades into the out of the (into) and into (time) passing by; bye-bye black sheep of the counting: counting sheep the passing (of the mind) as it (passes by) the time (as it fades) into sleep; sleep does my eyes, (lids down) up (down) UP! sliding down without connection: sleep does my eyes as the sleep (dep) does me... does me (tucked) into warm blankets of muffled thoughts of muffled thoughts of...

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4 comments

[n/a] ifni 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
Why does so much of your poetry sound like music to me?
[n/a] nentwined › ifni 7-Mar-05/4:23 PM Reply
I'm glad it does. I like to find a trickling, bouncing, burbling rhythm in everything. Dance, really. But dance is music. :)
[9] LilMsLadyPoet 11-Jul-05/9:37 AM Reply
Sounds like some lyrics I have read...They make good money...Could fly...yeah...sure...would like to here the music to it, though...
[0] mr cunt 25-Feb-07/6:20 PM Reply
Shite.