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A hard life

by INTRANSIT

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 Dec 2002 · Edited 13 Dec 2002 · 20 comments

From pristine shelter into stoic virgin vastness Travelling through the whiteness of time standing still. To tunnel into an individual world and sit staring jigging. A pull. Finger tracing the hash marked flesh and freedoming. Striking bundling returning To his sweet prune and raisins that use Nothing more.

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[n/a] horus8 11-Dec-02/7:34 PM Reply
possibly, holding more meaning than an incubus song.d
[1] poetandknowit 11-Dec-02/9:21 PM Reply
. Is this about horus8? "and sit staring
jigging" this made me bend over with laughter. Granted the third vodka tonic helped, but this is comic genius. A work of heartbreaking staggering genius.
[n/a] Bachus › poetandknowit 11-Dec-02/10:01 PM Reply
why are you clinging to that book title all day? it's old news i read it a year or two ago if my memory serves me correctly, which it does...let me guess? it's your favorite book because you wrote it. i'll fucking match your three gin and t's and raise you a six pack of fosters.t
[1] poetandknowit › Bachus 11-Dec-02/10:04 PM Reply
I have not read it actually. I just find the tile well amusing. And drinking is a gentlemanly activity that is done 1) while competing, say over a game of billiards or 2) over a good conversation, which varies with the amount ingested. It is not to be taken as a sport. Where are you manners?
[5] <~> › poetandknowit 11-Dec-02/10:19 PM Reply
it is a disappointing book. it starts out well, but in the end, loses itself in itself. it is too much genius for its own good. but it is a fast read.
[1] poetandknowit › <~> 11-Dec-02/10:29 PM Reply
Is it fiction? It has a stupid title? Have you read Jonathan Ames?
[7] UnityMitford › poetandknowit 12-Dec-02/11:26 AM Reply
amusing or not, you're quoting the title incorrectly.
[1] poetandknowit › UnityMitford 12-Dec-02/11:32 AM Reply
So what. Did I put quotation marks around it: no. Did my point come across with the desired effect: yes.
[7] UnityMitford › poetandknowit 13-Dec-02/9:11 AM Reply
whatever your point may have been, old chomp.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › poetandknowit 12-Dec-02/10:44 AM Reply
No but I'm glad I can at least make you laugh.
[5] <~> › INTRANSIT 12-Dec-02/11:05 AM Reply
where is the rose poem?
you frustrate me!
leave it be!

[n/a] Bachus 11-Dec-02/10:06 PM Reply
it's not about the son of osiris and clitiris he was paraded on pillows and spoiled by the slee-stacks the hardest thing he's ever felt ever was a ten and a half inch hard black idaho blackened po-tat-oe shaped like an obelisk squatters most scrumptuous fantasy an bigger obelisk. unless the raison is gay penis and the prune is the purse.e
[1] poetandknowit › Bachus 11-Dec-02/10:15 PM Reply
I see, so you are drunk too.
[5] <~> › poetandknowit 11-Dec-02/10:18 PM Reply
who isn't? please!
[7] UnityMitford 12-Dec-02/11:27 AM Reply
i don't think you could mean "auger." it's a noun, the tool, not the act. you might mean "augur," but that doesn't make much sense either.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › UnityMitford 12-Dec-02/1:34 PM Reply
definitely not the u-r meaning. personally I dont see a problem with my usage. fully aware of what you are saying though.
changed. Anything else that might help?
[7] UnityMitford › INTRANSIT 13-Dec-02/9:13 AM Reply
i like "tunneling" much better. clears things up, although that's what i thought you meant all along. i have nothing else to pick on here. i like this very much.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › UnityMitford 13-Dec-02/10:06 AM Reply
Z's teaching me how to use the iron. Watch for more improvements.
And, thank you.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 13-Dec-02/7:07 PM Reply
http://www.gangbox.com/mp3/thorn%20apple%20the%20baby%20fat.mp3

nice retouches here's a x-mas present. enjoy.
[5] Jill Stockinger 1-Jan-21/11:42 AM Reply
liked your Eskimo and Fish poem much more, used many of the same lines and ideas.