poemranker ::last night by nessness

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Free verse № 300

last night

by nessness

Member since 2001 · Posted 16 Mar 2002 · 5 comments

an exhaled "I love you" and a kiss takes me away from this-- the monsters won't come if I'm beside you.

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5 comments

[n/a] deleted user 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
monsters is a charged but generic word that used carelessly is cliche. I'd drop it in favor of something more specific given the short length of the poem.
[5] anonymous 29-Aug-01/12:51 AM Reply
better now that it's shorter
[n/a] nentwined 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM Reply
very succinct and sweet, with an aura of so much more. beautiful, like an extended haiku.
[5] anonymous 10-May-02/9:13 AM Reply
fragmented & incomplete & utterly empty
[5] anonymous 13-May-02/3:00 PM Reply
A cut above other similar poems.