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A holiday warning

Member since 2002 · Posted 15 Dec 2002 · Edited 15 Dec 2002 · 12 comments

While shopping the malls beware the walls that sit atop eighteen wheels. For if you can't I'm sure you shan't be fearing the beige and teals.

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[n/a] Bachus 15-Dec-02/5:20 PM Reply
alright. damnit, this needs immediate surgery for if you can't, i'm sure you shan't be fearing the biege and teals.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › Bachus 15-Dec-02/6:16 PM Reply
righto,'tis done.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › INTRANSIT 15-Dec-02/6:22 PM Reply
a most excellent suggestion, good Sir Knight. and thank you.
[n/a] horus8 › INTRANSIT 15-Dec-02/10:18 PM Reply
are you out of your mind! i was kidding, i see what patti meant by calling you gullible. no sweat. i'm worse trust me...okay.. i see your structure, now they are built that way to either contrast one another (the stanzas) and then resolve, or go from birth to sudden unexpected death (in story sense) example;

While shopping the store
beware of the poor
That are clipping tags under rags

For if you can't
I'm sure you shan't
Put your clothes with wynona's bags (just kidding lol)
Find their clothes in one of your bags
or stuff your clothes in one of their bags..it's endless
and you can mix it up for days! you can start a series.

[n/a] INTRANSIT › horus8 16-Dec-02/6:13 AM Reply
Thanks for the comments people. I'ts just about not paying attention to what you are doing. thats all. I'm really sorry everyone spent their time on this. It's a throw-away. geez Y'all know I can do better. 10-4?
[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> › INTRANSIT 16-Dec-02/2:01 PM Reply
time is what i have, and yes i know you can.
[0] poetandknowit 15-Dec-02/6:23 PM Reply
This sucks.
[n/a] INTRANSIT › poetandknowit 15-Dec-02/6:26 PM Reply
not tonight dear, I have a headache.
[0] poetandknowit › INTRANSIT 15-Dec-02/6:34 PM Reply
I did not ask for a suck or a fuck I just said your attempt at poetry sucked. Simple as that. 10-4?
[n/a] Bill Z Bub 15-Dec-02/6:31 PM Reply
beige and teal? you lost me.
[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> 15-Dec-02/6:47 PM Reply
bad christmas sweaters and socks? i think he meant bad colored clothing left on racks put into presents...forget it.
[5] <~> 15-Dec-02/9:13 PM Reply
why? you give no reason. will i be arrested for buying hot merch off the back of one? are they poorly driven? are they forming a new hybrid-gang--sort of a C.H.U.D. but rubber and metal?
you must give flesh if you want grey to function. bones are not enough. your voice cannot be made out unless you speak. in complete thoughts.