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Free verse № 33073

The Sadistic Mirth

by Freethinker1602

Member since 2003 · Posted 1 Jan 2003 · Edited 25 Jul 2003 · 13 comments

The breath of air I breathe Is drawn in a sharp gasp And then to exhale is a long Piercing shriek That I alone can hear My life exists in agony My existance in suffering And I suffer in desolation I refuse to move Refuse to allow myself to heal It is my hand that causes the pain I am the murderer I bring Pain to the innocent My death would be welcome To those that have reason to hate It is my time to seek a Vengeance so unjust that I Am marked as an evil force I am the beast unleashed Know my pain

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13 comments

[8] Bobjim 2-Jan-03/8:28 AM Reply
Pian? surely pain. sorry, but it did kinda ruin it. Redo it and you get a 9. as it is, a well deserved 8.
[9] ChunkyHunkyMonkey 2-Jan-03/5:26 PM Reply
its good but im sure im still into the love poems believe it or not
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 10-Jan-03/1:58 PM Reply
A good try!
[n/a] RGallet › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 10-Jan-03/4:56 PM Reply
look at the top 15 sometime
[7] cleverdevice 15-Jan-03/2:38 AM Reply
Good, untill the last line, which I read as a mistake futhur and thoght it siad 'Know my piano' that woulda been hilarious.
[7] cleverdevice › cleverdevice 15-Jan-03/2:38 AM Reply
Could you please change it to 'know my piano'? please?
[0] Tintagiles 31-Jan-03/7:22 AM Reply
Yawn.
[n/a] razorgrin 31-Jan-03/9:39 AM Reply
The redeeming part was the "know my pian" bit. Funniest twist ever. All this time I was reading what looked like a Serious and Heartfelt Poeme, but pian was a great satirical twist. Of course if it really is just a typo, that makes you an illiterate fucktard.
[n/a] Freethinker1602 › razorgrin 26-Feb-03/3:44 PM Reply
Thank you so very much. I changed it. be happy. Unfortunately the word processor doesn't catch every little error
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Freethinker1602 26-Feb-03/3:54 PM Reply
It's just like a MAN to rely on a machine to write his poetry for him. I suppose you'd like the whole of human life to be determined and controlled by machines? People like you would have us constantly strapped to some sort of bionic gurney, receiving nutrients through a futuristic "graviton thermometer" and expelling the unwanted matter into a curious funnel-shaped tube held by the animated slave-robot we call "Newman" (NEW MAN).

You need to get your face out the science textbook and start realising that poetry comes from the HEART. That's why it's called "poetry". Did you know that "HEART" has over two letters in common with "POETRY"? Well you do now. I suggest you think about that one the next time you post one of your chauvinistic, technocratic diatribes.
[n/a] Freethinker1602 › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26-Feb-03/4:18 PM Reply
Perhaps you misunderstood the comment. I try to catch all of my errors before posting, so I run them through word processor. The poems are submitted from a journal that I keep with me at all times. Most of the stuff you read is from the beginning of September. I just try to catch all errors. My futuristic idea of the earth is total annihalation of the human race. Bush will take care of that one for us though...
[n/a] horus8 16-Jun-03/1:51 PM Reply
The only thing you have in life is an ace homepage. The rest you stole from kids on the short bus.
[n/a] horus8 26-Jul-03/11:38 AM Reply
An opera for the bolemic.