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Haiku № 35226

Haiku Moon

Member since 2002 · Posted 10 Jan 2003 · 3 comments

Watch. From the meadow comes the Haiku Moon.... Five birds rise soundless, Seven clouds reel in the blue, Five rays from the moon. Five o'clock moon shine, Daylight steals your position, Though stars start shining. Above the corn sway, Your liquid white disk looks down, On the fading day. How deep is the sky? How close are the stars that shine? How empty the black? Back to the ground now, Lying still, soaring high too, Cool air takes warm breath. In cascading grey, Steam clouds of lighter than cold air moving away. Watch. Into the air goes the Haiku Moon.

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[6] <{Baba^Yaga}> 10-Jan-03/6:47 PM Reply
THE LAST TIME I SAW SOMETHING COME OUT OF THE MEADOW IT WAS THE WET DEAD LED, AND oh sorry, that my friend was essentialy my last straw. we must move past the meadows now...lets walk together for a moment behind the mere fields and meadows, amd yes even the birds gosh darnit let's get to THE MISERABLE FOREST OF DECREPID REDUNDANT SYMBOLIC TERMS AHHHHHHHH! forfeit, classical poetry died today my friend..you fought hard, but unfortunately art school one..i've seen the future and this aint it...have a 6 for prosperity though.
[6] <{Baba^Yaga}> 10-Jan-03/6:49 PM Reply
watch..into the air goes my flaming bag of puppy shit. plurp..
poo poo. doo doo. the same old same old..i know it's safe..i know it's refreshing, but if you did a google search on it..you'd faint.
[7] Prince of Void 28-Aug-04/6:18 AM Reply
i like this poem it's really good