Other № 37962

Sierra

Member since 2003 · Posted 25 Jan 2003 · 1 comment

her eyes so big and bright, shining her mouth so small and humble, quiet her hands so fragile yet strong, soft her nose so pleasant and precious, beautiful her face paints a picture of the world we will know she looks to me to say " i love you" she smiles to say "don't worry..only hope" she grasps my hand to say "she needs me" she wrinkles her nose to say "life is new today" her face paints a picture of the world we will know

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[7] nentwined 26-Jan-03/7:08 AM Reply

some scan problems, but overall nice. "her nose ... beautiful", for instance, stumbles me. I'd also put a line break between "her" and "she", and possible "she" and "her" to hint to the reader of the switch. 7.