WorkingDream

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 Jul 2002 · 2 comments

Miscellaneous pieces of metal, and numbers, Chase me around the room. I try to escape Jump up on the dresser Roll under the bed Crawl toward the door But it is useless, they will prevail, I will be engulfed. But then I wake up

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[5] Red_is_life 12-Jul-02/7:24 AM Reply

Good but i dont like the end

[3] deleted user 16-Jul-02/9:45 PM Reply

This would be a good poem. Unfortunatley, it just seems that you are describing a dream other than expressing it in poetry.