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Tomb

by GekoHawaii

Member since 2003 · Posted 7 Mar 2003 · 2 comments

It all hit me at once Now I'm buried in this mess My lungs cry out for air As I pray for a quick death I scrape at caving walls Of this new stress fed tomb Orverwhelmed with chaos This pain will all end soon It's too late to turn back now I've done my share of harm The past can't be restored My life's lost all it's charm Do not show me pity Just let my world collide With daggers sharp as diamonds As my happiness dies

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2 comments

[n/a] Bill Z Bub 8-Mar-03/9:08 PM Reply
blork
[8] Massokissed 2-Apr-03/10:46 PM Reply
I like it, its just that last line... "as my hapiness dies" i dunno maybe i am just nitpicking. Very good.