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Strung (Free verse) by bunniesnangels Women are pearls you string,
Slid next to one another with a satisfying "plink,"
Each singly-purchased treasure cherished momentarily
And only with a new one in your pocket
Do you dare release the gem you're fingering.
2/4/02
Up the ladder:
help me understand
Down the ladder:
Heil Pope
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Posted: March 11, 2003 7:16 AM PST; Last modified: March 11, 2003 7:17 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.1788044 Overall Rank: 4865 Comments:
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Ranger @ 212.140.127.206
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12-Mar-03/12:50 PM
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Love it!
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bunniesnangels @ 155.76.95.249
> Ranger
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12-Mar-03/12:56 PM
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thanks.
reminds me of the four wives in the movie "raise the red lantern". Very good.
this cries to me for more of a beat:
Women are pearls that you string, Slid one to another with a satisfying "plink." Each purchased alone, momentarily shone - and so on. somehow it makes it more vindictive for me that way. like you are ramming the words home, with each hard beat. 144 view(s)
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