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Free verse № 43777

The Bloody War Of Angels

Member since 2002 · Posted 13 Mar 2003 · Edited 13 Mar 2003 · 11 comments

Sodom fornicates with courtesan's on the Dead Sea Scrolls, Michael watches through moist oval velvet these forbidden desires,. Satan manicures his hooves whilst reading Corinthians, While God still tries to create mankind into Messiahs. Angels corrupt the cherubs into disposing of stars, They take the Plough and hurl it in to Mars. Satan orbits Saturn, Adding 6 more rings to his most beautiful planet, While God was away perfecting Earth and peace, Devils were at play in the abyss. The Fanged cherubs rid the sky of all stars, And the carnal demons of nocturne come hungry, Devouring there very creators, Deflowering the virgins of God. They have come to take us. And my eyes bleed black from sights of pleasure, My face licked by forked hissing tongues. The sky is lacerated by Raphael's feather, And God is too busy to notice, He's listening to love songs. Satan and St Michael shake hands and conspire, As God engulfs in a rage of fire, And Gods bastardized mortals embrace the darkness, That for so long they were denied, The last sentinel relinquishes their vigil of tedium And souls become unpurified by each and every one of them, Mortals and Demons writhe naked, eating grenache on the tablets of the covenant, And everyone is fat on sin, Everyone is sexual, Skin into skin, The Lord Of Darkness addresses the nation, And says unto us all, LET THE GOOD TIMES BEGIN !

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11 comments

[8] lastobelus 13-Mar-03/9:52 AM Reply
sweet

s/there/their/ in stanza 3 line 3 before pk gets here and craps

my nitpicks: stanza 2 line 1 bugs me because its awkward. why not just something like angels trick the cherubs into killing the stars. or angels corrupt the cherubs and they start killing stars. or something.

and stanza 4 line 1. The rest of the poem is startlingly original, making "eyes bleed black" stand out for it's familiarity.
[9] Bachus 13-Mar-03/12:00 PM Reply
My real father was a dark angel, an incubi. That's why i'm supermany and have perfect nails and hairs.
[10] spank me baby yeah 13-Mar-03/2:39 PM Reply
I'M SPEECHLESS, THIS IS FUCKING AWESOME, AND YEAH GODS BORING BRING ON THE EVIL MEISTER.
[8] deleted user 13-Mar-03/3:05 PM Reply
i really liked this, the imagery is fantastic
[10] INTRANSIT 13-Mar-03/3:11 PM Reply
I believe you've outdone yourself. Have a FWOT.
[7] daniella 21-Mar-03/8:23 PM Reply
danse macabre!
[0] poetandknowit 23-Mar-03/7:00 PM Reply
hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha.

no, wait.

hahahahahahaaaaaahahahahahahahahahahah.

This poem is beyond bad.
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom 24-Mar-03/12:43 AM Reply
Too much acid. Your only suppose to eat one sugar cube at a time!!
[10] Mr Pig 28-May-03/8:13 AM Reply
Oh my
[10] god'swife 6-Jun-03/12:19 PM Reply
I got it. Today, after too little sleep and a cup of coffee and a hit of the remedy, I got it, and it was crazy and beautiful to see.
[8] Hostileintent 11-Aug-03/7:15 AM Reply
a work of art.lessson for us all.