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Free verse № 44497

Lover's Portrait

by Dancer

Member since 2003 · Posted 17 Mar 2003 · 4 comments

I will paint your portrait Your face will be sad no sparkle in your eyes no smile in your frown And your body will be all twisted Your hands will be green the color of your skin will be grey like its been beaten I will show your dark heart like the portrait of Jesus but your picture will look hurt you are of course cause you finally realize how I feel how you made me feel when our love is gone

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4 comments

[5] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 17-Mar-03/6:42 AM Reply
It's 'it's'.

It's 'Jesu'.

It's a pile of toss.
[6] Caducus 17-Mar-03/6:49 AM Reply
its not that bad, but it could be better the end is teen magazine style
[7] deleted user 17-Mar-03/9:45 AM Reply
u can make this better
[7] Bachus 18-Mar-03/1:42 AM Reply
God is was goods then in you chokie doo de in the hiccup.. last chirp pardon me. 7.i