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Member since 2003 · Posted 17 Mar 2003 · 12 comments

crying infants. tear-stricken faces. weeping adults black stained cheeks. horror filled eyes, haunted by blood covered bodies. cry ... weep ... dust blows over the wounds that were never there.

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[6] deleted user 17-Mar-03/9:43 AM Reply

i'm not sure what ur sayin here

[n/a] elizabethann › deleted user 17-Mar-03/9:48 AM Reply

well my dear sweet jay ... that makes me happy. if my poetry is too hard to understand then i'm doing something right. but for your sake, allow me to explain. this poem is a mixture of things. one - september 11. two - my own personal experience with fights. if it still makes no sense, well then it never will.

[n/a] lastobelus › elizabethann 17-Mar-03/10:02 AM Reply

JESUS CHRIST, HOW COULD YOU DO SUCH THINGS TO A POOR INNOCENT LITTLE INFANT!!!!!!!!!!!!

[n/a] elizabethann › lastobelus 17-Mar-03/10:05 AM Reply

lol. well it wouldn't stop crying ... i had to.

(note: i never actually hurt an infant .. that actually refers to the september 11 mixture of the poem)

[n/a] lastobelus › elizabethann 17-Mar-03/10:17 AM Reply

A long time ago, I used to think that my poetry was good because it was hard to understand. After many years I realized my poetry was hard to understand because I was an untalented hack who's unable to say things clearly and precisely.

So I got a job.

[n/a] elizabethann › lastobelus 17-Mar-03/10:20 AM Reply

Well the way I look at it is, everyone else that has read the poem understood it quite well. Now if Jay is unable to read it and get it, that's really a personal problem.

[n/a] lastobelus › elizabethann 17-Mar-03/10:59 AM Reply

really? What is the consensus on the meaning of "that were never there"?

9/11 never happened, it was a media conspiracy? A mass hallucination by New Yorkers? It's as if they were never there because everybody's forgotten? What does it MEAN elizabethann?

I think it's bullshit. Gratuitous. An cheap attempt to allude to mystery THAT ISN'T IN THE PIECE ITSELF.

I'm going to pick on you for a while because you do the same kind of bullshit I did and called it poetry when I was a teenager until somebody kicked me in the teeth long enough that I started thinking about what I was writing (not that that helps me much, lol, but whatever)

[n/a] Blindproject217 17-Mar-03/4:13 PM Reply

Not sure what u mean

[n/a] elizabethann › Blindproject217 17-Mar-03/4:14 PM Reply

And I'm not sure that you should ...

[n/a] Blindproject217 › Blindproject217 17-Mar-03/4:16 PM Reply

I understand it, I just dont see where its going. Its just a random mental image with no purpose. I dont mean to trash peoples stuff, Im just given my 10 cents, thats what this whole thing is about

[n/a] elizabethann › Blindproject217 17-Mar-03/4:19 PM Reply

Hm. I didn't realize that poetry had to have a purpose. I mean for me, poetry is just how I get my feelings out. I don't write to entertain others or make them sit down and think about life.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › elizabethann 17-Mar-03/10:04 PM Reply

WELL THEN, PERHAPS YOU SHOULD KEEP YOUR POETRY IN YOUR SPECIAL SECRET DIARY INSTEAD OF SMEARING IT ALL OVER POEMRANKER.