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Villanelle № 45750

Unemployed

by OneFingerAnswer

Member since 2002 · Posted 31 Mar 2003 · 5 comments

He shaved off his facial hair He got his mop cut He went to the job fair His face is raw and bare He hated it but He shaved off his faical hair She picked out what he should wear God, he looked ready to putt He went to the the job fair He gave up time he couldn't spare He busted his butt He shaved off his facial hair Nothing came to him there Nothing got him out of his rut He went to the job fair No one had a job to share He cheepened himself like a slut He shaved off his facial hair He went to the job fair

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5 comments

[5] maffy 1-Apr-03/4:13 AM Reply
NOT BAD!
[5] Mr Pig (again) 1-Apr-03/10:27 AM Reply
Too much 'He'
[n/a] OneFingerAnswer › Mr Pig (again) 3-Apr-03/10:10 AM Reply
"He" is the subject of the poem. Of course "He" is going to show up. Not to mention that the point of a vilanelle is repetition.
[8] rahson_s 13-Dec-05/9:54 AM Reply
Sounds like me.. Im feeling it,,
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 15-Jan-08/4:46 PM Reply
Couldn't He have just gone round to someone's house and cleaned up?