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Villanelle № 46400

For Kristen

by thepinkbunnyofdoom

Member since 2003 · Posted 7 Apr 2003 · Edited 7 Apr 2003 · 26 comments

Dry your whining eyes Kristen You just have to keep in mind Broken hearts do mend Forget the words of your ex-boyfriend It’s obvious that he is blind Dry your whining eyes Kristen He still plays those same ole games he has always been If you merely look I’m sure you’ll find Broken hearts do mend Crying tears for him should be a sin Don’t let yourself be swallowed by his kind Dry your whining eyes Kristen Please don’t lose your faith in men Leave him and those wasted tears behind Broken hearts do mend Don't let that fool make you forsake mankind So rewind your hate for men and let your heart touch my mind Dry your whining eyes Kristen Broken hearts do mend

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[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos 7-Apr-03/5:09 PM Reply
Good grief...
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › Jeremi B. Handrinos 7-Apr-03/5:20 PM Reply
Yeah I know but I thought I'd venture into a Vilanelle. Never realise how restrictive it is. But on the techincal side its alright isn't it? Seriously asking to try improving my style and write a half way decent Vilanelle.
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos › thepinkbunnyofdoom 7-Apr-03/5:39 PM Reply
"I know that your pist at everyone with a dick between his legs
But with all my heart I love you and so I beg"

these two lines need to rhyme with -ind as your others. then you'll be fine.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › Jeremi B. Handrinos 7-Apr-03/6:32 PM Reply
Thanx I honestly wasn't sure but I'll tweek it.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › thepinkbunnyofdoom 28-Jun-03/11:17 PM Reply
Again another girl Poem. This one for my Kristie. I actually wrote it for her before we started going out. It started off as a lyric and I should have kept it that way but I really wanted to try a Vilanelle. I wrote it to see her smile. No other reason in the world. She was just my friend's sister to me at the time even though I liked her alot, even then(Actually since the moment we met to be honest). Its probably among my worst 5 poems to be brutally honest.
[7] horus8 7-Apr-03/11:33 PM Reply
here. don't say i never did nothing for you.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › horus8 7-Apr-03/11:37 PM Reply
Yeah along those lines
[0] lunar 9-Apr-03/12:06 PM Reply
Quite sweet. What did you do with yourself before u were on this site btw?
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › lunar 9-Apr-03/12:34 PM Reply
Before I found this site I was just writing poems and drawing in class. I started writing as a way to express my anger(and clear my head of all my problems) and slowly found my way to move beyond just writing whenever I was pist. The first poem I ever wrote was mom and dad and that started off as Just a song I'd play when my parents pist me off. Then I got into writing Lyrics and got a band together. My friend Lindsey asked to see what I was writing one day in class and she loved what she read. She said I should try and get published but I realised that I'm not that skilled yet. So one day after a really bad break up I decided that it was time to start sharing my poems and I looked on a search engine for a site where I could submit poetry. I found this one and its free and I liked the Idea of ratings and Letting other people post comments about what you write so here I am. Other than Playing guitar, having fun being moronic and writing poems, I also Study film making, Audio production, and Do a radio shift for whss 89.5 and Thats where I first started using the pink fluffy bunny rabbit of doom as my on-air name and then because that was too long here I cut it down to thepinkbunnyofdoom. How bout you?
[0] lunar › thepinkbunnyofdoom 9-Apr-03/12:43 PM Reply
I just asked because its obvious u spend alot of time on this site! (its a decent site i would too if i had the time!) im at college with about half the people on this site -devosky (cannot spell it!), t'ien, bobjim, MuDeNve, ranger, blade, cleverdevice, yardbird etc! thats how i know about this site - i never thought i could write poetry until this site and its made me see some of my friends in a really different light coz ppl write things on here theyd never say! Ive noticed there are not very many females though and everyone seems to be gay!oh well i guess what poetry does to you x
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › lunar 9-Apr-03/1:57 PM Reply
I don't know about the number of females here or most peoples sexuality but I do see your point about being able to write things you'd never be able to say. The reason I'm on so much is that I come home from school Talk on my Instant messanger for awhile and check my email. Then If I'm bored I goto my favorites sites Newgrounds.com and Poemranker.com(I'm bored alot).
[0] lunar 9-Apr-03/2:35 PM Reply
Hehe college is so much work im doing chemistry at the moment its 10.30pm and im no where near finished so im on poemranker! see the logic? (i dont!) I dont know if they are actually gay there are just a lot of that type of work around (see dark angel and bobjim especially!)Do u have msn inn the US?
[n/a] Bobjim › lunar 9-Apr-03/3:26 PM Reply
I'll let you know I'm as straight as a ruler, thank you.
( No, really )
The reason I write things here I wouldn't say is that people can missinterperate your words or meanings, or the aims of your poems. My poetry is funny as far as myself and my sad, lonely friends are concerned. If people don't like that, they get offended. On the site it doesn't impact on my good stuff as it is on another account. People find it hard to seperate a personality from a person. I can be funny and a bit sick or wierd, or serious and thoughtful, but people see a whole person, not the parts.
[n/a] Bobjim › Bobjim 9-Apr-03/3:30 PM Reply
Dear lord, I'm sober.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › Bobjim 9-Apr-03/4:12 PM Reply
Hey there is nothing wrong with being able to write things you'd never say. Trust me I'd never write half what I write if I was held accountable for every letter and space. Anyways Your preference of man or woman doesn't bother me in the least. Just be careful how far you let yourself slipt those personalities K? Cause Then you really will be two different artist.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › lunar 9-Apr-03/3:59 PM Reply
Some how I do see the Logic. Chemistry isn't the type of subject you understand until 4 in the morning or the crack of dawn before exams(both only if your awake the night before). I'm not sure You mean the msn international news network? Yeah but I think its called something different.
[0] lunar › thepinkbunnyofdoom 10-Apr-03/9:15 AM Reply
well my chemistry is now done and handed in! i mean msn messenger its part of hotmail and is a form of instant messaging where u put in the persons email and if they have msn annd are online u can talk to them - im sure u have something similar!
i guess thats the good thing that this site allows people to express themselves in as many different ways as they want to and cannot be judged for it. (i have nothing against gays either btw i have had many-a lesbian pursuit! hehe (o:
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › lunar 10-Apr-03/5:01 PM Reply
Yeah I have Almost On Line(AOL)'s Instant Messenger(AIM for short). Other than yourself I don't know of anyone with With an MSN messenger. About the lesbian pursuits... So have I but in most cases no one calls it that case I'm a guy.
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[0] lunar › thepinkbunnyofdoom 12-Apr-03/6:24 AM Reply
well obviously its a UK thing then - most people have it over here! You must be writing/posting about one poem a day - i cant keep up! i will look at them now. Have you seen Strictly Ballroom? Great film im listening to the album -not my usual taste but very good - it was the only one in the store! here is a Kat. (spelt with a K coz thats my name) X
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[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › lunar 12-Apr-03/7:54 AM Reply
I'm not sure. If I watched it, Its been awhile since I've seen it. I only write in spurts so don't be too alarmed. Pretty soon I'll unable to write anything for months. Right now I write about 2 poems for every 3 days and I post about three aweek.
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[0] lunar › thepinkbunnyofdoom 13-Apr-03/6:30 AM Reply
I like Greenday too, especially time of your life but it has so many associations i cry whenever i hear it! i see youve got MSN now - im very impressed! (im assuming ur name is Jason then) X
[4] suckmychucks 10-Apr-03/1:48 PM Reply
someone likes green day...
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › suckmychucks 10-Apr-03/4:56 PM Reply
How ever did you know?? I do. In fact quite alarmingly so.
[8] NewbieMe 10-Apr-03/7:59 PM Reply
I wish this one's for me :S

wait, can I change the name to maria instead?

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[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › NewbieMe 11-Apr-03/3:41 AM Reply
Only if you change it from Vilanelle. Cause Maria throughs The ryhme off. But for you go ahead.

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[6] Mr Pig (again) 12-Apr-03/1:32 PM Reply
Vilanelles would have to be French there so bloody complicated in my opinion. I am inexperienced with this genre of writing but know the basic laws to them. The subject matter is too teen angst but this may make a good lyric. I would have liked to have seen 'broken hearts DONT mend, it would have obliterated the obvious cliche. However my darling don't despair all this needs is a few drafts and touches of creative glitter and originality and you'll have it sparkling like the star you are.

Thank you so very much for your time in commenting on my work, I love you all the same on this site, it has been my pleasure meeting you.

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