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Fraternity hazing the sheepdog

by horus8

Member since 2002 · Posted 7 Apr 2003 · 13 comments

<chookie, chookie, chookie> Here's some milk to go with your cookies. No, Settle down, just calm the fuck down. But Sir they're embedded in my cavity. Should we send in the boys from the 100 and 33 and a .25? NOOOOOO! GOOD GOD MAN, AND lose the element of suprise!? Son I don't know who brought you up, but the fact stands that you can't shave the sheep dog. I forbid it. We will however let you <chookie, chookie, chookie> [Fraternity hazing is illegal and degrading, so don't ] Dark iron howitzer big gun, BIG HARD STEEL TUBE SWOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOSH! and the boys all go hooray And the sheep dog barked balder then a mascot should The lamb stood there dead already, but too scared to fall over yet, Then I whispered in it's ear and it jumped the fence of our minds so we all slept like baby baby babies and cried a little too. Thee end.

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[n/a] OneFingerAnswer 8-Apr-03/2:40 AM Reply
Ummmm... Fun images but abstraction loses it's power when you can't follow the chord to a point.

By the way, it's = it is. It's = the one belonging to it. (last stanza)

Can you point me towards some of your more meaningful poems? I rather enjoy those.
[n/a] Bachus › OneFingerAnswer 8-Apr-03/1:38 PM Reply
Meaningfulness is in inconsistent accident. A year from now this one might become meaningful, so i have no way in knowing because of the ever changing environment and self awareness levels fluctuating endlessly.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Bachus 8-Apr-03/1:40 PM Reply
PERHAPS IN A YEAR YOUR COMMENT WILL BECOME MEANINGFUL

LOL TO THE MAX
[n/a] horus8 › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 10-Apr-03/7:50 PM Reply
word, max tHe xam ,drow
[10] INTRANSIT 8-Apr-03/6:12 AM Reply
This is the kind of thing that proves the point to my villanelle. Could be a new fave. The closing STOMPS!
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 8-Apr-03/7:47 AM Reply
You just never stop writing, do you? Do you think that constant, unchecked writing is a sign of a) immense creativity b) a wild, untamed spirit c) being full to bursting with fresh, challenging ideas?

(I love it when he starts a b cing don't you?)

I haven't had a new idea in about 8 months. And the ones from 8 months ago were really just recycled from a year before that. And they were mostly stolen from TV.
[9] Nanshe 8-Apr-03/7:56 AM Reply
Knowing they were RIGHT, for god and country?
And large-breasted american women? And piss beer?

Have a 9 for creative knotting.
[9] <~> › Nanshe 8-Apr-03/8:42 AM Reply
welding
[9] <~> 8-Apr-03/8:43 AM Reply
nice. hoop. la.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 8-Apr-03/9:16 AM Reply
CHURN BABY CHURN
IT'S A HAM EXTRAVAGANZA
[8] Mr Pig 8-Apr-03/9:27 AM Reply
I hear the words on the streets to descibe this is LOL ?

Well I'm astonished I never understood the lingo, a hearty hoo haa indeed.
[n/a] richa 8-Apr-03/11:26 AM Reply
like the lamb stood dead line
perversely fun imagery excellent
[9] Nice guy 9-Apr-03/6:00 AM Reply
spookie, chookie....under a haze.