poemranker ::Did You Notice? by Bonehiss

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Did You Notice?

Member since 2002 · Posted 8 Apr 2003 · Edited 10 Apr 2003 · 3 comments

Did you notice The last stir of the light, Fleeing the shadow Of hopeless finality Creeping toward my heart, And the silence, As you turned again To stone cold idol, Guarding the secret haunt Of bygone lovers, And their secret dreams, Abandoned In the dark night Of your soul? Did you notice The raging sun Of a fearful new dawn, Burning on the horizon, Silent witness to the carnage Of endless days to come? Did you notice My savage passing? Drawn against life’s current Into Hell’s eternity, A casualty of your own cruel nature. Did you notice?

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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 8-Apr-03/1:35 PM Reply
Opal moonlight
Plays coyly on my gilded cape.
Did you notice
My bloodied anguish
Drip down upon the scarlet garden?
AND SO FORTH IN THAT VEIN.
[10] horus8 › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 11-Apr-03/9:07 AM Reply
Onyx sunlight
Fights extrovertadly in our chapped cloak.
Does I ignore
Your watery splendor
Freeze up into the emerald desert!
AND SO WITH ON THAT BONE.
[0] asimpleman 11-Apr-03/3:44 AM Reply
No i made a mistake by bothering to notice shiity poetry like the above