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Concrete № 50065

Para Metres

Member since 2002 · Posted 23 May 2003 · 10 comments

The paranormal paralyses --- So the saner soul lives through disguises, a fact storm in an empty mind; logorrhea saves the blind informivorish parasites devouring life in mega bites. In Paraguay the peon praises, as parallel his hands he raises, the paradigm that shifts his sight, the parasol that makes him right, parading dream-like paramecia, life in eternal paramnesia. Did paratroopers paragliding park your thinking in a siding, for paralytic wills partaking, of the fantasies they’re making? Apparently, reports a journal, such apparitions are quite normal. Within the mind where parallax is there often follows parataxis. Then paraphrasing parakeets pronounce in parabolic tweets like paragons gone paranoid some parashah you must avoid. A paraclete that lives in locks might help you find, among these rocks, some paradise in paradox; some freedom from the ticking clocks, and for your future, in a box, some trousers and a pair of socks.

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[9] horus8 24-May-03/2:23 PM Reply
Well, I say, not concrete, but a fine ode none the less.
[n/a] Blue Magpie › horus8 25-May-03/3:49 AM Reply
What is concrete
[9] INTRANSIT 25-May-03/4:29 PM Reply
Just read it aloud to yourself, then tweak thebeats that go bump. it'll be perfect. loved it.
[n/a] Blue Magpie › INTRANSIT 26-May-03/10:34 PM Reply
Thanks for the read and the vote. I still don't know what concrete means as a poetic category
[n/a] <~> › Blue Magpie 27-May-03/8:14 AM Reply
well, you could either click on the ??? next to the type of poem box when you submit, or you could use poemranker's very own help (http://www.poemranker.com/site-help.jsp) or you could google it or you could get someone else to do it for you, like i just did. jesus, how fucking lazy are you? did you ever do aything that required any effort? like learn to ride a bike, or tie your own shoes? are you sure you can read?

your friend, doug
[n/a] Blue Magpie › <~> 27-May-03/8:26 PM Reply
Ahhh thanks.
[n/a] Blue Magpie › <~> 27-May-03/8:26 PM Reply
[n/a] Blue Magpie › <~> 27-May-03/8:27 PM Reply
Ahhh Thanks.
[n/a] Blue Magpie › INTRANSIT 27-May-03/8:23 PM Reply
I have and here it is tweaked, I hope.

In Paraguay the peon raises,
in parallel his palms and praises,
the paramour that gives him light,
the paradigm that shifts his sight,
parading dream-like parenthesia
through parasoltic paramnesia.

The paranormal paralyses ---
saner souls live through disguises.
A fact storm in an empty mind;
and logorrhea saves the blind
informivorish parasites
devouring life in mega bites.

Did paratroopers paragliding
park your thinking in a siding,
for paralytic wills partaking,
of the fantasies they’re making?
Apparently, reports a journal,
such apparitions are quite normal.

Within the mind where parallax is
there often follows parataxis.
Then paraphrasing parakeets
pronounce in parabolic tweets
like paragons gone paranoid
some parashah you must avoid.

A paraclete that lives in locks
might help you find, among these rocks,
some paradise in paradox;
some freedom from the ticking clocks,
and for your future, in a box,
some trousers and a pair of socks.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 17-Aug-03/6:40 PM Reply
Twist on concrete, cool.