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Goddess of the vineyard

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 Jun 2003 · Edited 12 Jun 2003 · 19 comments

Vinifera creep reach longingly to entwine her. Knowing exactly when the grapes will be harvested, she will dote on them until they are ready then walk away weeping tears of joy.

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[9] horus8 11-Jun-03/12:44 PM Reply

and bare feet. (I'll send you my edit from last night, it obviously didn't reach you, stand by).

[n/a] INTRANSIT › horus8 11-Jun-03/1:00 PM Reply

I thought about the bareness. I think there were system probs last night. we couldn't gt on line this mornin'.

[7] scitz 11-Jun-03/3:43 PM Reply

LAst 2 lines of S1 just fuck it up, other than that I really absorbed myself in to this so I ask you from the bottom of my tiny black heart, change it. 7

[8] Robert K Foster 11-Jun-03/4:22 PM Reply

powerful. lovely. grapey.

[n/a] god'swife 12-Jun-03/7:39 PM Reply

When they're ready she just walks away? Are you sure?

[n/a] INTRANSIT › god'swife 13-Jun-03/7:41 AM Reply

yes, she is only part of the vineyard, not the winery. and she did.:( I pray she keeps in touch with us all.

[n/a] god'swife › INTRANSIT 13-Jun-03/7:50 AM Reply

So are there other Goddesses? Maybe you should write about all the Gods involved? (In touch with me?).

[n/a] INTRANSIT › god'swife 13-Jun-03/8:11 AM Reply

mornin'. and yes, you, all of her friends. I have found, that once a life has been entered, it is there for eternity. whether the soul is concious of it, or not.

[n/a] god'swife › INTRANSIT 13-Jun-03/8:33 AM Reply

Once a life has been entered, it is there for eternity? Sounds deep, please explain.

[n/a] INTRANSIT › god'swife 13-Jun-03/8:40 AM Reply

a short interaction between two people, or a group of people, leaves something on or in all parties involved.

[n/a] god'swife › INTRANSIT 13-Jun-03/8:43 AM Reply

Ohhhhh... viruses?!

[n/a] INTRANSIT › god'swife 13-Jun-03/9:32 AM Reply

well, yes, that's the downside. I was thinking more on a spiritual level. Maybe I'm just being influenced because I'm reading Rumi right now.

[n/a] god'swife › INTRANSIT 13-Jun-03/9:42 AM Reply

So you're talking about cause and effect? Spiritual influence? An exchange of love or pain or anything? so the attendant at the gas station has some kind of spiritual influence over me?

[n/a] INTRANSIT › god'swife 13-Jun-03/2:49 PM Reply

yes,yes,yes,maybe. if you say talked briefly about something other than the exchange of money for fuel,yes. but he/she does not have influence OVER you. some change happens,even if it is not immediately apparent. am I making sense?

[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> › INTRANSIT 13-Jun-03/1:08 PM Reply

Rumi's good stuff.

[8] deleted user 12-Jun-03/9:02 PM Reply

Glad to see a "decent" poem, at last!!

[9] horus8 › deleted user 12-Jun-03/9:23 PM Reply

Yes, I agree Tina, now hold me my little terrorist, love me.

[8] richa 13-Jun-03/10:41 AM Reply

yes nice logic/ flow
a bit in the spirit of an extended haiku

[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom 13-Jun-03/11:26 AM Reply

Interesting Idea about the spiritual influence but it still sounds like a stretch to me. I Love this poem by the way. -10-