poemranker ::The Dry Wash by Kitch

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Free verse № 53780

The Dry Wash

Member since 2003 · Posted 23 Jun 2003 · Edited 23 Jun 2003 · 3 comments

Clouds absorbed the Aryan sun, That lit a path on to the oceans panorama, Alone with the conflict of nature, Everything came together, Sewn in sound, and vision. A Star Clipper sailed on gold velvet, Controlled by the breaths of Poseidon, Watched by dreamers like me, Whose thoughts drift away, Like the constant sea.

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3 comments

[7] horus8 23-Jun-03/6:29 AM Reply
Not bad, and simple, to the point, and as refreshing as waking up naked in the zoo.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer 23-Jun-03/8:04 AM Reply
calming vision.. its like the sigh expressed after sex.. hmm what to bless you with.. ill give this a -6-
[7] richa 24-Jun-03/1:32 PM Reply
quite good

im not sure the two verses necessarily hang

like a landscape painting really, which is difficult to express in poems ask bob dylan