poemranker ::walking by Dangzter

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Free verse № 54914

walking

Member since 2003 · Posted 3 Jul 2003 · 3 comments

I was walking down the street when I stopped by a homeless man Who was begging for money and Was knelt on the floor with arms raised I asked him kindly "why do you need this money that you beg for?" And he replied kindly " for the roccs that lay on the ground and the dirt that is burried in the earth" Reluctantly I gave him the money that would feed the senseless addiction that america fostered in this modern era I walked away quitely and watched from the corner of my eye and saw the man buying roccs and dirt that layed on the earth sadly i regreted ever walking.

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3 comments

[n/a] cleverdevice 3-Jul-03/6:20 AM Reply
Shoulda shot him, end his pain, stupid junkies. Waste on society.
[7] richa 3-Jul-03/6:26 AM Reply
senseless addiction of america is a bit politicised and lacks subtelty.

other than that this has a good musical rhythm, i like it
[5] Kitch 4-Jul-03/4:07 AM Reply
Not crazy about this at all, the ends imaginative but it lacks interst and reeks of self importance 5