poemranker ::My Goddess... by loneshadow29

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My Goddess...

Member since 2002 · Posted 13 Jul 2003 · 2 comments

could your beauty be measured like distance and time I cannot conceive it to be so for such beauty could never be for if your radiance were measured in distance then you could touch the furthest reaches or if your beauty were time like the hours of the day eons would pass and still not glimpse even a fraction of what I see before me those eyes, full of life and love piercing my heart and soul all the sadness fading away feeling only your presence your smile, so sweet and pure feeling myself melt inside your touch so gentle, so soft like the rains in spring becoming lost in your soul through those enchanting eyes unable to move, unable to breathe such beauty unsurpassed my heart hammering as if for dear life feeling myself draw closer my eyes closing slowly so close now, my last vision of your eyes, your loving smile your gentle touch lost in your beauty please let me stay

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[7] richa 14-Jul-03/8:53 AM Reply
lucid, but a bit saccharin and I cringed imagining you saying it to someone

not bad though
[5] god'swife 15-Jul-03/10:09 AM Reply
the first three lines are very good.