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Free verse № 58732

Clay Man

by eliastemplar

Member since 2003 · Posted 1 Aug 2003 · Edited 1 Aug 2003 · 10 comments

He was a clay man So I twisted his arms into obscene positions. Then I made him a generous and flexible woman And I smashed them together. Just for fun.

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[n/a] fuzzylogicisagimp 1-Aug-03/9:24 AM Reply
PRONUNCIATION GUIDE

"Generouse" is a French word, pronounced "ZHJON-AIR-OOZ" and meaning "Fuck Bunny"

Not to be confused with the English word, "generous".
[n/a] horus8 1-Aug-03/4:35 PM Reply
flouroscope
[n/a] Fear of Garbage 1-Aug-03/7:24 PM Reply
interesting....at least
[10] Lifeboatman 2-Aug-03/12:54 AM Reply
Ang galing... 10
[9] SupremeDreamer 2-Aug-03/9:49 AM Reply
Amusing. blessed with 9.
[9] cleverdevice 4-Aug-03/6:48 AM Reply
I like it, provocative images of playing God. Creation vs destruction. As a Marine don't you get the piss ripped out of you for being a poet?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › cleverdevice 4-Aug-03/7:03 AM Reply
lol
[n/a] eliastemplar › cleverdevice 4-Aug-03/10:18 AM Reply
There are deffinately stereotypes associated with Marines, but we come from all walks of life. My fellow Marines nick named me Smokejumper because I used to be a fire fighter for the Forrestry Service.
I'll admit that I'm not a typical Marine. However, I think you'd be hard pressed to accurately define the typical Marine.

Thanks for the comments,
Lcpl.Busby,B.W.
[9] Bill Z Bub 18-Aug-03/4:59 PM Reply
a very pithy version of Genesis?
Very nice.
[9] Rilke4ClosetLesbians 19-Aug-03/2:55 PM Reply
Love it!