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Trollop: A Married Mans Revenge (Free verse) by DreamerSupreme
[Horus, this is dedicated to you.] I love to kill. Thats what I think to myself as I thrust my knife deep into your skin, making you weep, while you plead for me to stop, knowing I won't. Ripping you apart slowly, I bathe in your blood, anointing myself, smiling showing my razor incisors. I threw your remains to the wall like a rag doll, and sat down, my skin painted a deep red, staring at your body. You were so beautifull when you were alive. Now you are a Picasso image adored by me, while my eyes admire your torn form. You look better dead.

Down the ladder: Picasso

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.1666665
Weighted score: 5.313765
Overall Rank: 3536
Posted: August 23, 2003 2:53 AM PDT; Last modified: August 23, 2003 4:23 AM PDT
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[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.170.157 | 23-Aug-03/2:56 AM | Reply
did Mr. Giggles like that? ;)
[n/a] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.170.157 | 23-Aug-03/2:57 AM | Reply
I NEVER KNEW HOW FUN IT IS TO KILL TILL NOW! ITS FUCKING WONDERFULL! I FEEL LIKE A MILLION DOLLARS!
[n/a] Caducus @ 195.92.168.169 | 23-Aug-03/12:20 PM | Reply
Horus will love this. You just can't put the man down and he bleeds olive.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 66.81.150.193 > Caducus | 23-Aug-03/12:32 PM | Reply
heh, well all his talk about murder and his goading me to get in on the theme just slowly worked its way into me, and i suddenly had the mood for it, so i put effort into creating a murder piece of some value.. or i think it has value, i am happy with what i came up with anyway..
[8] richa @ 81.86.229.91 | 24-Aug-03/4:52 AM | Reply
penultimate verse: you were so beautiful....
is when this really gets going. Certainly memorable.
[9] The_Third_Isis @ 24.126.116.54 | 24-Nov-03/6:23 PM | Reply
Knife (phalic?) deep into your..(froidian) weep. slowly bathe in your blood.
Annointing "myself" smiling showing my incisors. deep(again? hmmm) red your body.You are an image adored/admired by me.What passion! Je te adore..Thanx by the way for your poetic genetic remark on "sirius" make over. I am lucky to have suns who are talented Good looking 10+.Poetic/art/music/acting.
Si vu ..please ,overlook my misspells. Ciao bello!
[n/a] Don-Quixote @ 204.31.166.172 > The_Third_Isis | 24-Nov-03/7:54 PM | Reply
I suck at spelling too.. ;/

(infact, h8 got me to misspell transparency twice in a row? then DA used it against me.. memories..)

have you ever tried www.spellcheck.net? I use it after inspecting my work by-myself- Actually has helped me to improve my spelling, but meth+typing? another snag all together.
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