poemranker ::R.O.X. by InvertedEar

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R.O.X.

Member since 2003 · Posted 3 Sep 2003 · 8 comments

No eye has ever dived into the sea of my emotion But yours pierced the heart of it Glide with me as I hold your hand Let this current of affection pull us under. You peeled the cynic off my chest Wander within my soul This passion we possess captured the beauty Of an afternoon we both stole. As I breeze through your words Those glances unfiltered A stare reflected the serenity of your smile Whispered by a solitary heart - ‘I’ll be here only for a while.’ Beneath masks of ambiguous tales Sail through the images inside my head Hand me the canvas of your thoughts And we’ll draw and weave colors as we lay in bed.. And we’ll sing and pluck the strings of your guitar Meander in my restless mind The harmony that bonded the sharps and flats In our music rests a love that’s hard to find.

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8 comments

[7] SupremeDreamer 3-Sep-03/5:36 AM Reply
Hrmm. blessed with 7. Do you only write erotic poetry btw?
[n/a] InvertedEar › SupremeDreamer 3-Sep-03/7:12 AM Reply
hrmm..you found this one erotic??
[7] SupremeDreamer › InvertedEar 3-Sep-03/7:31 AM Reply
with the language you used, yes. subtle in nature.

ex: And we’ll draw and weave colors as we lay in bed..

gets me thinking of bed wrestling, skin blushing in arousal, rainbow hallucinations from orgasm.. shit like that.

-shrug- what were you attempting to do with this poem then?
[7] SupremeDreamer › SupremeDreamer 3-Sep-03/7:32 AM Reply
No eye has ever dived into the sea of my emotion

penetration... i mean, if its not erotic, you sure got me all confused with this type of writing. that or im just an oversexed bastard.
[7] sliver 3-Sep-03/7:23 AM Reply
I don't know about erotic, but it's a great song. She always makes good music eh?
[8] J.B. Manning 3-Sep-03/1:21 PM Reply
I can't imagine what it would sound like in song, but I'm nothing of a song writer. However, it does a make beautiful rhythm as it flows through my thoughts. I like it.
[9] <~> 4-Sep-03/9:22 AM Reply
do you want a comma in s4, after beneath?

nice job, here.
[9] killingjuliet 31-May-04/10:22 PM Reply
beautiful