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Villanelle № 64624

Evicition notices & hang nails

Member since 2003 · Posted 10 Sep 2003 · 2 comments

Three fine days to live and grow Take the veil from off your head Very toxic, and as big as your toe It wasn’t the fruit don't you know "OUT OF PARADISE ADAM & EVE", God said Three fine days to grow and live Shamed, and naked, forced to sew With cloths, their bodies fed Very toxic, and as big as your toe Red with white dots umbrella bow Now it's a dessert, no flower beds Three fine days to live and grow One bite & you will feel the flow Walking far, their soft feet dried & bled Very toxic and as big as your toe They start over as the ground tilled row This is Adam and Eve's story don't be mislead Three fine days to live and grow Very toxic, and as big as your toe.

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[8] horus8 12-Sep-03/3:44 PM Reply
And eviction. but for your age attempting a vilanelle is brave and noteworthy, congratulations, but you spell for shit.
[n/a] grendal 12-Sep-03/6:40 PM Reply
no,
I meant dessert.