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on the edge of creation

Member since 2001 · Posted 17 Sep 2003 · 7 comments

A goal heightens the senses and the mind (sometimes to distraction); distraction from the consensual reality can lead to visions (thoughts, ideas) and baseless knowledge (like God) My mountaintop springs forth in pixels and people, my fasting not deliberate but not the less for it: I sit, hoping that the buzz of deerflies (how did they get to my mountain?) does not drain my soul (or my blood if I fail to attend them); consensual reality screams, whines, cajoles, and THREATENS for my ATTENTION and I... I seek for visions. One hundred days on the mountain, I seek for visions, thoughts, ideas, baseless knowledge, to convey / with craft / to others.

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[n/a] GeschÃ¤ftsreise 17-Sep-03/10:00 AM Reply

GshcÃ¤ft (Disguised as Deerfly): "and yet you skipped over my babelfish poetry?" :)

[9] richa 18-Sep-03/7:30 AM Reply

Good this,

Like the '/s' and the brackets, a worthwhile experiment with language.

[n/a] nentwined › richa 18-Sep-03/7:38 AM Reply

thank you. I'm a big fond or parentheticals, and the /'s were "borrowed" from monsiour DeLacroix (they were bright and shiny and I could not resist!)

[n/a] nentwined 18-Sep-03/7:40 AM Reply

as a note, this is part of a "poem a day for 100 days" challenge. so if it's particularly lacking, that could be why. I'm posting the (probably 1/10 as things draw on) few that I think might have a chance at redemption.

[10] deleted user 1-Oct-03/7:57 PM Reply

I like this! Oakland eh? I was born in Sonoma and lived in Bodega Bay. :)

[n/a] nentwined 7-Mar-05/4:31 PM Reply

Hmm. Going back in--this could use some rhythm work. The deerflies are out of place. Though I still like most of it. That's certainly a bonus.

[9] Tintagiles 12-Sep-05/7:11 PM Reply

I really rather like this. Though the "(how did they get to my mountain)" I'm not sure about. Maybe break it into another line or something -- the rhythm seems off because that one line's so long.