poemranker ::I am one by red

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I am one

by red

Member since 2003 · Posted 20 Sep 2003 · 3 comments

Morning sun you pull me from the place where, i am one. You take me in, the form I came and i fall back, just like the rain.

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3 comments

[n/a] red 20-Sep-03/9:10 AM Reply
hope you all enjoy this as much as i do
[5] EAger to Offend 20-Sep-03/12:46 PM Reply
Much better than the rose one. I'd take out the line spacings and all of the commas. It seems to me that the places you put commas should have been line-breaks.
[9] deleted user 20-Sep-03/12:47 PM Reply
It's light, fluffy and melts in my mouth.

take out the word 'the' in the last line.