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On the Occasion

Member since 2003 · Posted 2 Oct 2003 · Edited 2 Oct 2003 · 7 comments

Guardian Big-Hearted And strong of will Guide me long Keep me true Never abandon me While this earth is my home Ever from birth You serve anew Many thanks to you, and still more To Him from Whom you've come Of gratitude oft'n overdue

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7 comments

[7] J.B. Manning 2-Oct-03/3:23 PM Reply
I like the last line best.
[10] sliver 2-Oct-03/8:48 PM Reply
You must be Native American.What Occasion may I ask?
[n/a] tadpole › sliver 3-Oct-03/10:56 AM Reply
The Occasion is the Feast of our Guardian Angels.
[7] richa 3-Oct-03/8:51 AM Reply
not sure about the rhyme at the end of each verse, too many words seem to interfere in between, such as whom and you.

overall pleasant,
[10] electroman1979 7-Oct-03/9:32 AM Reply
good poem, and sliver, can't you see that that was about the angels? i knew rigth away, open your eyes :P~
[10] sliver › electroman1979 10-Oct-03/4:17 PM Reply
listen here bud. you know better than to question my intelligence, I don't have any.
[7] dancin_n_da_moonlite 13-Mar-05/1:40 PM Reply
this is nice - 7 -
megan