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Free verse № 69222

To Paint Acceptance

by versus_u

Member since 2003 · Posted 8 Oct 2003 · 5 comments

Your easel stood at the dark corner of my room For months of resistance to canvas and oil Empty bottles of turpentine Left me scraping our palette of lost love With a knife we used to handle with utmost grace In pushing gobs of paint – now dry. I hung your portrait just last night Unmindful of the pain your absence has caused For today that easel will brush with light Amid memories of that gray morning I stood beside your grave.

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[6] Shuushin 9-Oct-03/6:28 AM Reply
Despite the previous vote of ten, I really wasn't convinced until the last line - and really, if it was a poem of just that one line, I would be just as satisfied.

this bit in particular:
"Left me scraping our palette of lost love" gave me a little grimace.

Dont' get me wrong though, I do really like the idea of the empty easel as it relates to a missing person, then the memory of him/her as the painting; that's really cool.

Just thinking the palete related stuff feels awkward - complicates the composition of the poem ... (keep it to three things, one that contrasts with the other two, right?)
[10] Lifeboatman 23-May-04/2:50 AM Reply
I never new you were so good at this... and all this time I thought you were a poser like me... 10 for everything...
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Lifeboatman 23-May-04/5:11 AM Reply
I agree... this made me feel so sad... you are so good at just painting pictures with words... i feel like you have touched my soul... even though i dont know who u are... simply beautiful... 10...
[n/a] versus_u › Lifeboatman 30-May-04/10:18 AM Reply
hey you forgot? we are all posers except the great earless guy during his crayola-colored existence. hehe.. thanks :D
[10] Lifeboatman › versus_u 14-Jun-04/12:06 AM Reply
That's just because there weren't any straightjackets then.. are you then afraid, dear lady, that you are a monster as well.. glad to see you are alive, always a pleasure..